The "What's on your mind?" thread

[Scottie]

Originally Posted by Moviefan1203

Prayers to France.

Without getting into a long-winded political tangent, I simply want to say that I'm so sick of the state of this world.

[WhySoBlu?]

I'm spoilering this whole thing to keep this post as unobtrusive as possible...

[Show spoiler]First of all, you probably shouldn't keep repeating variations of "showing their support" over and over in the same article. Use a thesaurus if you have to, but nothing screams amateur like repeating the same words/phrases like you're a kid trying to pad out his report.

As a nation divided begins to heal following a mass shooting that hits close to home, some citizens of the [Show spoiler] community came together to show their support of their local law enforcement agency. Several businesses showed their support by offering police officers small gifts, including free donuts and meals to officers who ate at certain restaurants over the weekend. The community support comes following the fatal shooting of 5 Dallas police officers last Thursday night.
[Show spoiler] Police Chief [Show spoiler] said,"The [Show spoiler] PD has a really good relationship with our community."
He also mentioned, "While several businesses and members of the community did bring by baskets of good, small gifts, etc, that the department was not asking for free stuff. They are just happy to be appreciated."
The days following the incident in Dallas has seen dozens of communities demonstrate their support of the police officers in their lives.
Both [Show spoiler] and [Show spoiler] Chamber's of Commerce shared public posts on social media expressing their support for their respective police departments.
At the start of the [Show spoiler] City Council meeting on Tuesday [Show spoiler] Mayor [Show spoiler] called for a moment of silence following the pledge of allegiance to "demonstrate support for those officers lost in Dallas and our local officers."
President Obama gave a speech on Tuesday at a memorial service for the police officers that were shot and killed at a demonstration last Thursday, July 7.
"Like police officers across the country, these men and their families shared a commitment to something larger than themselves. Cops don’t expect to hear the words 'thank you' very often, especially from those who need them the most." he said.
Former President Bush, speaking at the same memorial had his own comments about the work uniformed officers do for their communities.
"We know that the kind of just, humane country we want to build, that we have seen in our best dreams, is made possible when men and women in uniform stand guard. At their best they free us from fear." Bush said.
According to other media outlets in the area, there has been a strong showing of support in Texas communities for their local law enforcement officers. The responses in [Show spoiler] and surrounding areas has also been a positive one.

[Show spoiler]As for the mistake in the quote, here's what I was talking about:

He also mentioned, "While several businesses and members of the community did bring by baskets of good, small gifts, etc, that the department was not asking for free stuff. They are just happy to be appreciated."

I'm assuming he actually said "baskets of goods" not "basket of good," which would make that your mistake, not his.

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The days following the incident in Dallas has seen dozens of communities demonstrate their support of the police officers in their lives.

"The days following the incident in Dallas has seen..."

"Days" is plural - you should have used "have." Better yet, you should have used a better turn of phrase. What you wrote was fairly awkward and it really doesn't make sense to say "the days have seen dozens of communities demonstrate their support." It's also clunky to tack on "in their lives" to the end of that goofy sentence. It would make more sense to say something along the lines of "In the days following the incident in Dallas, dozens of communities have demonstrated their support for their local police officers."

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Both [Show spoiler] and [Show spoiler] Chamber's of Commerce shared public posts on social media expressing their support for their respective police departments.

Chambers should not be possessive.

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Former President Bush, speaking at the same memorial had his own comments about the work uniformed officers do for their communities.

You left out the other comma, which should go after the word "memorial."

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The responses in [Show spoiler] and surrounding areas has also been a positive one.

Again, the subject's plural, so you should have used "have" instead of "has." Also, how can you end that sentence with "a positive one," which is obviously singular, when you're talking about "responses," which is obviously plural?

I'm sorry, but this was well below professional work.

[Mighty Max]

Originally Posted by segagamer12

We don't have an online edition, I didn't have permission to share the story online, I wasn't going to share info that well I wasn't sure about. But whatever I was just being overly cautious better safe than sorry just in case. It's a very local paper. but sure maybe I was just being paranoid.

If you didn't have permission to post it, then why did you?

Originally Posted by WhySoBlu?

He's taking steps to help maintain his anonymity. Makes perfect sense to me.

Not really, since he wrote the article.
Anyone can grab that paper and see who the author of it was.

[Mighty Max]

Originally Posted by Moviefan1203

Prayers to France.

What happened in/to France?

[Mighty Max]

Originally Posted by WhySoBlu?

I'm spoilering this whole thing to keep this post as unobtrusive as possible...

[Show spoiler]First of all, you probably shouldn't keep repeating variations of "showing their support" over and over in the same article. Use a thesaurus if you have to, but nothing screams amateur like repeating the same words/phrases like you're a kid trying to pad out his report.

[Show spoiler]As for the mistake in the quote, here's what I was talking about:

I'm assuming he actually said "baskets of goods" not "basket of good," which would make that your mistake, not his.

[Show spoiler]
"The days following the incident in Dallas has seen..."

"Days" is plural - you should have used "have." Better yet, you should have used a better turn of phrase. What you wrote was fairly awkward and it really doesn't make sense to say "the days have seen dozens of communities demonstrate their support." It's also clunky to tack on "in their lives" to the end of that goofy sentence. It would make more sense to say something along the lines of "In the days following the incident in Dallas, dozens of communities have demonstrated their support for their local police officers."

[Show spoiler]
Chambers should not be possessive.

[Show spoiler]
You left out the other comma, which should go after the word "memorial."

[Show spoiler]
Again, the subject's plural, so you should have used "have" instead of "has." Also, how can you end that sentence with "a positive one," which is obviously singular, when you're talking about "responses," which is obviously singular?

I'm sorry, but this was well below professional work.

Sad, the state of journalism is.

[WhySoBlu?]

Originally Posted by Mighty Max

Not really, since he wrote the article.
Anyone can grab that paper and see who the author of it was.

Right, but it's a small local paper without any sort of online presence and we don't know where he lives. I can completely understand him not wanting to broadcast clues that would lead people to discover his real name and where he works.

[P-Rock]

Originally Posted by Mighty Max

What happened in/to France?

Terrorist attack in Nice, at least 75 dead, probably ISIS related. An idiot drove a truck into a crowd that were watching fireworks on a pier. Truck was loaded with guns and grenades.

[Mighty Max]

Originally Posted by P-Rock

Terrorist attack in Nice, at least 75 dead, probably ISIS related. An idiot drove a truck into a crowd that were watching fireworks on a pier. Truck was loaded with guns and grenades.

77 dead.

Driver sped up as he hit the first people, drove 2kilometers before the police killed him.

Truck was carrying weapons and explosives.

Is being labeled a terrorist attack.

Fireworks celebrating Bastille Day had just ended and people were leaving when it started.

[Will.]

Horrific

[Nielsb90]

**** this! 2 days don't go by without another terror attack. Impossible to really fight them. Regardless, I hope France scores a few extra kills in the coming days.

[Peachy]

I'm juste properly devastated....

[Moviefan1203]

Originally Posted by Peachy

I'm juste properly devastated....

My friend, my prayers are with you and your fellow citizens. God bless each and every one of you.

[Captain Flint]

Sick of all the terrorist attacks. Bunch of pussies who think they're making some kind of statement. It'll be put to an end soon enough.

[baheidstu]

Originally Posted by segagamer12

We don't have an online edition, I didn't have permission to share the story online, I wasn't going to share info that well I wasn't sure about. But whatever I was just being overly cautious better safe than sorry just in case. It's a very local paper. but sure maybe I was just being paranoid.

Yes, but why put Spoiler Alerts over top of the four hashtags that have been used to replace the town's name? Why not just use the hashtags?

[Jett Rink]

Why is Dalekbuster posting all over the internet? I am seeing his name everywhere I look.

[segagamer12]

Originally Posted by baheidstu

Yes, but why put Spoiler Alerts over top of the four hashtags that have been used to replace the town's name? Why not just use the hashtags?

It was just easier that way, keep it clean.

[C. Anton]

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[The Great Owl]

I have to say that I didn't really mind seeing Melania Trump's face all over my Facebook news feed today. It didn't bother me all that much to have to look at her over and over again.

So, hopefully she'll be the subject of more scandals and trending news stories over the next few weeks.

[Abby is Q]

It's shaping up that September and October are going to drain my bank account.

[segagamer12]

Originally Posted by The Great Owl

I have to say that I didn't really mind seeing Melania Trump's face all over my Facebook news feed today. It didn't bother me all that much to have to look at her over and over again.

So, hopefully she'll be the subject of more scandals and trending news stories over the next eight years.

Fixed that for you.