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[jadedeath]

Originally Posted by Purplegrasshopper

I didn't get the film at all...what was the whole point and what was it supposed to be about?

That the one guy at the restaurant was disgusted by or unsure of what meat is used in the food they were eating.

And the showing of where the meat actually CAME from.

Logan

[Marine Mike]

Originally Posted by jadedeath

That the one guy at the restaurant was disgusted by or unsure of what meat is used in the food they were eating.

And the showing of where the meat actually CAME from.

Logan

Are you sure it was the meat as he was staring at the guy putting 'noodles' in his mouth? I'd get that if they showed meat hanging from the guy's mouth.

Also, the guy didn't bring the bag of meat into the store so how are we suppose to gather that? Maybe if he showed the guy putting the meat back into the bag and then delivering it into the resturant I'd gather that.

EDIT: To me I just saw that guy puking because he just saw some nasty stuff come out of that bag as he was eating, not that he made the connection.

[masoud90]

The delivery man delivers two ready boxes to the store, but leaves the unready meat in the sack...when the sack gets exposed, the two men eating start to vomit...I am sorry if this is confusing haha. Thank you guys so much for your time though!

[Marine Mike]

Originally Posted by masoud90

The delivery man delivers two ready boxes to the store, but leaves the unready meat in the sack...when the sack gets exposed, the two men eating start to vomit...I am sorry if this is confusing haha. Thank you guys so much for your time though!

Well the problem is that its unclear that they are delivery men and not people just happening to go to the same restuarant as those two guys. I recommend try making the connection a tid bit more clearer. I find it a bit of a stretch to expect people to make the connection.

[masoud90]

Originally Posted by Marine Mike

Well the problem is that its unclear that they are delivery men and not people just happening to go to the same restuarant as those two guys. I recommend try making the connection a tid bit more clearer. I find it a bit of a stretch to expect people to make the connection.

Yeah I think the only way to fix that is to change to subtitles for the film because that is the only thing I can do so far =) already moving in production for the next film.

[jw]

do away with Brittany music, ruined the overall feel and point . Distracting

[masoud90]

I will manage the music level more, but Britney Spears is always represented in my films in one way or another...but I get what you mean though and I still have to finish editing the sound tones.